I Am From
I am from a place where everyone is down to earth
a place where I have lived every since birth.
This is a place where only certain people stay.
This place is known as the Islands
where only the baddest of the baddest lay.
Here in the Islands loyalty and respect are key
simply because this is a place where only the best of the best can be.
This is a place full of love and no competition
because all of us here know our position.
We all have goals, and we play our roles.
Living in the Islands feels like owning lots of gold.
This is a place that is like heaven on earth
like I said I've been here since birth.
Everyday brings something new.
Being from the Islands never makes me blue.
All of us here know each other oh so well.
All of us here find each other to be quite swell.
This is a place where we strive for the best,
although none of us here try to outdo the rest.
I am from a place where everyone is down to earth
a place where I have lived every since birth.
This is a place where only certain people stay.
This place is known as the Islands
where only the baddest of the baddest lay.
I liked it, but I don't know what you mean by "the islands"
ReplyDeleteIt was confusing to me
DeleteI thought it was great and I liked how you repeated the first stanza for emphasis.
ReplyDeleteI like how you were referring to where you came from. It says that you love where you're from
ReplyDeleteThe way you rhymed really stood out to me. I also loved how you repeated the first stanza at the end. By islands what do you mean ?
ReplyDeleteThe islands sound pretty tranquil. No competition, probably peaceful too. How do I get in?
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem. It was well written! Good job.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you incorporated in the islands as your place of birth. It was very descriptive and showed the roles in your life. Good job!
ReplyDeleteMikayla,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on creating a picture in the readers mind about the Islands! I like how you used your emotions to tell us about this place too. (Never makes me blue)
I like how you used the first stanza also as your last stanza. Also I like how you pointed out the key of life in your poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you repeated your first stanza, it all ties together. And how everyone gets along on the island and their is peace in their lives. It sounds like a lovely place to escape to, to take a break from this crazy world.
ReplyDeleteMikayla, your poem was great. One part that really stood out to me was, "This is a place where we strive for the best, although none of us here try to outdo the rest."
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, that was the most powerful line of your poem.
Your poem was really good and rhythmic. I also like how you said it was full of love and competition, it feels like everyone is friendly and enjoys themselves where they are.
ReplyDeleteThat was super /swell/ ahahhah. Yeahhhh.
ReplyDeleteI like how you repeated the first stanza. It was really good.
I like how you said there's no competition because everyone knows their position. That is actually really true.
ReplyDeleteYour poem was really well written! I loved it! I liked the part where you said "this is a place that is like heaven on Earth."
ReplyDeleteI like your poem a lot I especially liked your repetition it really caught my eye I kept thinking about it too.
ReplyDeleteI like how repeated the first stanza and how you said that everyone tries to do there best but never tries to out do the rest.
ReplyDeleteYou rhymed very well and your beginning/end it was great!
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